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04 July 2011 @ 08:03 pm

I like the overall style of this shot (and set) in that it's very pensive and quiet. I wish that her hair had a bit more of a texture to it because I like the braids but they've come out a bit flat? The background is a bit TOO 'studio', I would have liked more of a gradient to it

I think the retouching on her cheeks could have done with a bit more finessing because the shadows are a little chunky in places.

Aaaand I love her boobs.

Again, I like the messy hair look but I think if it had a bit of wax or something in it then it would have given it a bit more shape and substance. Again, the background really should have some more depth. I like the posing and how casual and disheveled it is.

I wish I had retouched the makeup a little more, the highlights are a little too sloppy, they could have been really finessed and precise and her eyebrows really could have a lot more of a pop. I also wish that her jaw stood out a little more and that the front light was a little lower so that her eyes weren't in shadow.

I love how severe the highlights are here, but again I wish that the eyebrows were up to the same pace as the nose and lips. It would have been nice if her eyelid was a little shiny also. And I don't know what it is but something about how the light is falling on her hands is unusually appealing to me.

I'm really drawn to her lower lip, it's such a beautiful shape I just wish that her upper one had a little more volume because they look a bit disproportional.

Also I think that not being able to see the background works in the favour of this shot, because it makes it just a little more abstract and stand-alone, not giving it a specific context.

love the profile, love the gradient in the background and again very casual posing and expressions.

I would have liked a catchlight in her eye, just because it looks a bit unfocused. I do like the dreamyness of her gaze but I think it would have pulled it all together just a little bit.

I think she looks really good but again there are a few chunky makeup things I should have cleaned up and the shadow under her eye is a little intense.

my favourite. I'm so obsessed with her expression - so powerful and haunting. A tad cross-eyed but I can look past that - her eyes are such a fantastic shape.

I like that the lighting has a lot of depth to it. Again a bit of a background gradient would have been nice. And totally randomly but I like that a bit of the back light on the right spills subtly onto her eyebrow.

Fun fact: she's actually wearing one of my photoshoot backgrounds but I like that I've arranged it to actually look like an actual piece of clothing. And something editorial and interesting, too!

set thoughts

I really like the cohesive colourscheme. I like that the saturation and contrast aren't totally over the roof but I'd still classify it as "me".

There's a cohesion to the posing and looking down in every shot, but I think I could have been a little more dramatic with her arms just to give the shots even more variance.

It's the cropping that really lets me down the most here - they're all the same 'head and shoulders' thing. Sure, they look good as solo shots but as a whole it's just SO repetitive. And I've found a few different ways to interpret the 'head and shoulders' by going profile and mixing up angles but I need to crop out for a few! Or maybe go even closer in for one?
Joshblueymcphluey on July 4th, 2011 06:37 pm (UTC)
hey thankyou so much, this is EXACTLY the kind of comment I was hoping I'd get from posting these! And don't think your opinion isn't good enough, I love your icons and respect your artistic eye so this feedback is really appreciated! :D

I envy you for working with models and in a ~studio withr eal equipment

wanna know a secret? It's actually not that hard, all you need is a really big room and a few lights... the REAL skill comes in knowing how and where and when to use those lights!

some sets, however, are either too dark or even blurry

haha yeah, I'm coming to learn than I'm possibly the only person who really loves that XD but I do so much! I'm so conflicted :P
fouroux: [V&T] a yellow flowerfouroux on July 4th, 2011 07:12 pm (UTC)
:D ♥

well, if dark and blurry is your passion, I'm sure you can eventually turn it into a style that might be your trademark in the future (: I'm sure it's possible, but probably difficult.

wat is your goal in photography anyway? do you want to do advertisement?
Joshblueymcphluey on July 4th, 2011 07:34 pm (UTC)
You know those photographers like steven Klein, steven meisel, Ellen Von unwerth, Annie liebovitz, Paulo roversi, mert alas and Marcus piggott who shoot editorials and campaigns and celebrities and magazine covers and such? I want to be one of those.

But for the moment I want to focus on just taking the best shots I possibly can and if I get work out of it then that's just a bonus
fouroux: [V&T] a yellow flowerfouroux on July 4th, 2011 10:49 pm (UTC)
yeah, I know what kind of photography you mean (: definitely enjoy those, too. especially campaigns. I love overall themes.